You know, this story would be a bit more engaging if the MC's opinions and feelings about all her activities were expressed explicitly. Like say she finds the repetative physical activity of archery relaxing, or have her giggling as she thinks about cursing her cousins as she learns her curses. Or mention that she's felt stiffled not being able to spread her wings and rob any treasuries blind lately... It feels like a report on her activites rather than a story. Although I guess this is an issue with Chinese prose more than anything.
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